Tips for writing your personal statement
Writing your personal statement can be difficult – where to begin? Get hints and tips on structure, content and what not to write from an industry expert.
An insider’s view
Personal statements may seem formulaic, but they can be critical to the decision-making process, and admissions tutors do read them.
If you’re applying for a high-demand course, your personal statement could be the deciding factor on whether or not you get an interview.
The Director of Marketing and Student Recruitment at the University of Gloucestershire, James Seymour, shares some top tips for preparing your personal statement.
What makes a good personal statement?
This is your chance to demonstrate your enthusiasm and commitment and show us what value you can add to a university. In the vast majority of cases, universities are finding ways to make you an offer, not reject you – the personal statement is your chance to make this decision easier for them!
First, you need to explain why you want a place on a course. Take a look at James’ tips on what you should include:
- Explain the reason for your choice and how it fits in with your aspirations for the future
- Give examples of any related academic or work experience
- Show you know what the course will involve and mention any special subjects you’re interested in
- Demonstrate who you are by listing any positions you’ve held, memberships of teams or societies, and interests and hobbies
- Show consistency in your five UCAS choices. It may be difficult for an admissions tutor to take you seriously if your other choices, and references to them, are totally different. If your choices are different, you should explain this in your statement. The UCAS form is blind. Admissions tutors don’t know the other universities you’ve applied to, or your priorities, but you should still be consistent
- Keep it clear and concise – UCAS admissions are increasingly paperless – so most admissions tutors/officers will read your statement onscreen
Explain what you can bring to a course and try not to just list experiences, but describe how they have given you skills that will help you at university.
Don’t just say: I am a member of the college chess club. I also play the clarinet in the orchestra.
When you could say: I have developed my problem-solving skills through playing chess for the college; this requires concentration and analytical thought. I am used to working as part of a team as I play clarinet in the college orchestra and cooperate with others to achieve a finished production.
What will admissions tutors look for in your personal statement?
To decide if you’re the right fit, universities and colleges are interested in how you express your academic record and potential. This should be backed up by your reference.
Those working in admissions look for evidence of:
- Motivation and commitment
- Leadership, teamwork and communication
- Research into your chosen subject
- Any relevant key skills
Admissions tutors aren't seeking Nobel laureates. They’re looking for enthusiasm for the course being applied for, and self-reflection into why you’d be suitable to study it. What value could you add to the course?
Remember to keep this audience in mind when writing your statement.
Real-life example: the good
Real-life example: the not-so-good
Structuring and preparing your personal statement
You could have excellent experiences, but if they’re arranged in a poorly-written statement then the impact will be reduced. So, it’s important to plan your statement well.
A well-written personal statement with a clearly planned and refined structure will not only make the information stand out, but it’ll demonstrate you have an aptitude for structuring written pieces of work – a crucial skill needed for many university courses.
You can use it for other things too, such as gap year applications, jobs, internships, apprenticeships and keep it on file for future applications.
There's no one ‘correct’ way to structure your personal statement. But it’s a good idea to include the following:
- A clear introduction, explaining why you want to study the course
- Around 75% can focus on your academic achievements, to prove how you’re qualified to study it
- Around 25% can be about any extracurricular activity, to show what else makes you suitable
- A clear conclusion
Personal statement dos and don’ts
- Plan the statement as you would an essay or letter of application for a job/scholarship
- Consider dividing the statement into five or six paragraphs, with headings if appropriate
- Be clear and concise – the more concentrated the points and facts, the more powerful
- Use positive words such as achieved, developed, learned, discovered, enthusiasm, commitment, energy, fascination…
- Avoid contrived or grandiose language. Instead use short, simple sentences in plain English
- Insert a personal touch if possible, but be careful with humour and chatty approaches
- Use evidence of your learning and growth (wherever possible) to support claims and statements
- Spelling and grammar DO matter – draft and redraft as many times as you must and ask others to proofread and provide feedback
- During 2020/21, refer to the challenges you faced during COVID-19 lockdown in a positive way
- Come across as pretentious
- Try to include your life history
- Start with: "I’ve always wanted to be a..."
- Use gimmicks or quotations, unless they're very relevant and you deal with them in a way that shows your qualities
- Be tempted to buy or copy a personal statement – plagiarism software is now very sophisticated and if you're caught out you won’t get a place
- Make excuses about not being able to undertake activities/gain experience – focus on what you were able to do positively, e.g. as a result of COVID-19
Examples to avoid
James gives us real-life examples of things to avoid:
I enjoy the theatre and used to go a couple of times a year. (Drama)
I am a keen reader and am committed to the study of human behaviour through TV soaps!
I have led a full life over the last 18 years and it is a tradition I intend to continue.
I describe myself in the following two words: 'TO ODIN!' the ancient Viking war cry. (Law)
My favourite hobby is bee-keeping and I want to be an engineer.
My interest in Medicine stems from my enjoyment of Casualty and other related TV series.
I have always had a passion to study Medicine, failing that, Pharmacy. (A student putting Pharmacy as her fifth choice after four medical school choices – Pharmacy can be just as popular and high status as Medicine.)
Some final advice
Above all, remember that a personal statement is your opportunity to convince a university why it should offer you a place. So, make it compelling and there’s a much higher chance they will.